Rhayeqasr!

[LadyL]

All right - so a first draft (really first draft - come back to me with comments - I can start over, too, if you don't like this at all :0)

I
soar
I soar
in darkness
and the wind
is remembrance and
painful shards of light.
Still, I'm bound, unmoving,
With bell and hood around my neck.
Do not come near me, my pain will then
be yours. In red flow across my claws
I strike with eloquence, with strength
in darkness. The darkness is and is
and though you cut my chains
and speak to me
the hood is there.
And my desire,
blood, is
blood

What do you think? (Anyone else want to C and C, feel free :0)

[Rhayeqasr]

Heh, I love it ^_^ Not much to comment on, it fits him beautifully.

Wish I had a nack for poetry, I hate writing, but love to read...

[LadyL]

So you don't want me to rewrite it at all?

[LadyL]

He _is_ really a pretty boy, too :0) , btw

[Rhayeqasr]

honestly, no... I really like it ^_^ It wasn't what I expected at all, but I really like it!

Yes, he is a very purdy boy ::hugs him:: Memoru, the Euclide creator, is an amazing artist.

[LadyL]

That's great! :0) It was a really fun theme to write on too :0) (Now when I look at the poem, i see one could add "is" in the end, to make it look like a nicer shape

I
soar
I soar
in darkness
and the wind
is remembrance and
painful shards of light.
Still, I'm bound, unmoving,
With bell and hood around my neck.
Do not come near me, my pain will then
be yours. In red flow across my claws
I strike with eloquence, with strength
in darkness. The darkness is and is
and though you cut my chains
and speak to me
the hood is there.
And my desire,
blood, is
blood
is

but it doesn't sound as well - you may do as you please :0)

Hmmm... let's see - I would like to have one of your unnamed crits in exchange - they are supremely cute :0)

I would like one with a big fluffy tail and wings. Colours green and bronze (and maybe some other colour, too, if you want :0) Do you do jewelry? I'd like him/her (surprise me) to have maybe an earring or two :0) I really like their patterning - but if possible I'd like him/her to also have like a ridge with markings along the back (spots, or something like that) - like some dogs and horses have, you know :0)

That's good enough?

[Rhayeqasr]

Mmkay! I shall start drawing it right away. And by the ridge, do you mean like a version of a dorsal stripe? Like this? ponylagoon.muerte.net/define/definepics/dorsal.jpg

I love drawing these guys ^_^

[LadyL]

Yes! that is exactly something like that what I meant, I didn't know what it was called :0)

[Selena]

that's a great poem ^_^ i like it<3333

[LadyL]

Thanks Selena. I'm glad you like it!
~L~