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Post by LadyCrow on Jun 20, 2004 18:36:38 GMT -5
I need test readers for my desert story.
anyone interessed leave e-mail and I^ll mail it to them.
thanks
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Post by Indy on Jun 20, 2004 19:34:02 GMT -5
I would be glad to test read, although if it is very long, it may take me longer.
Indy
refuge@indyslair.net
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Post by Uny at hospital on Jun 20, 2004 22:00:19 GMT -5
*raises hand* I'm up fer a good read.. with another day in the hospital I could use somethin' to keep me busy. ^.^;;
unykness @ yahoo.com
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Post by sera not logged on Jun 20, 2004 22:58:24 GMT -5
*loves to read* ^^ hehe
seraaches @ vagueinsanity.net
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Post by Dyani on Jun 21, 2004 9:05:52 GMT -5
I'll do it! I'd be delighted to read your story! ^^
dyaniunicorn @ yahoo.com
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Post by Dyani again on Jun 21, 2004 9:06:46 GMT -5
By the way, does that picture say
may barbarians invade your personal space"?
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Post by LadyCrow on Jun 22, 2004 10:04:13 GMT -5
yes.. it does indeed say "may barbarians invade your personal space."
hehehe.. what can I say.. latin freak I am.
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Post by Conrad on Jun 23, 2004 15:18:54 GMT -5
And if you don't already have too many people reading your story, I'd like to test read it too.  mckuneguy @ yahoo . com |
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Post by LadyCrow on Jun 23, 2004 21:19:08 GMT -5
Not at all Conrad....the more the merrier.... that way I can get several different opinions and make my story even better  |
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Post by Dyani on Jun 24, 2004 10:13:28 GMT -5
Okay, I finished reading it and I marked all the changes I put in it so you won't get confused.
It was really interesting; I liked it a lot. Much better than most stories people ask me to read, and much more original. I liked the names.
But there were quite a few things I changed. Don't be offended by them, I'm just a grammar-sleeper and I want to be an English teacher. I mostly changed spelling and grammar errors, but I also exchanged a few words/phrases for ones I thought might sound better. You don't have to accept those ones.
There was one main thing that stuck out in my mind, though. It was where you said, "questions filled with mirth." I think the word you were looking for was "wrath" or something of the sort, because "mirth" means happiness, joy, and laughter.
So if you want me to, I'll send the story back with my editing marks.
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Post by LadyCrow on Jun 24, 2004 16:28:09 GMT -5
thanks for the comment Dyani... and I am really glad that someone that has english as a motherlanguage can help me out. I would be more than happy to read your reviewed version |
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