Need a Read? ^^

[sera]

A friend and I are working on a novel together, and I am quite curious for some feedback. . . ^^

We just moved over to a blog format, so pls scroll to the bottom post for the beginning. ^^

Anyways, pls let us know wot you think, and especially if anything is unclear or doesn't make sense. Thankies!

josieroetman.com/blog/index.php?cat=3

WARNING!!!!
This will probably have some adult themes, yaddayadda. . . I'm putting up a rating of PG-13 for now. . . ^^ You are forewarned!

[Stormelle]

If you see my post then tell me I may show some of my starts. ^-^;

[sera]

^^ lol uhm, see which post? ^^'

Thanks for the comment! ^^ I hope you (( and maybe some others, lol )) will start checking it at least somewot regularly. . ^^ hehe

And, yah, I'd like to see some of your starts!! *glances guilty at the hundreds of non-finished stories she has saved all over the place* ^^' hehe

[Stormelle]

This ones a mith that I did Don't know if I'll wright more.




How Earth Came To Be
By: Michelle Loveless

There once lived a young goddess who had a small round amulet. She cherished that amulet more than anything. The amulet was seventy percent blue and thirty percent green. When she gets angry sometimes the green percent turns gray on other occasions the blue percent dose.
One day she was strolling along in the wood when suddenly she remembered that she had meeting with two wood nymphs and ran as fast as she could. The wood nymphs showed sings of relief as the young goddess appeared.
“Where is your sister the wood guardian?” they asked in unison.
“Sea Foam” came the voice of her sister Tree Bark.” What are you doing? The water nymphs await you. She and her sister were twins and sometimes ended up in the wrong place.
Sea Foam looked at her sister and said, “Alright. Hold on. I must say something to these two” pointing at the two wood nymphs. “Well, ah I realize that you need water and it will soon come, so have no worries,” she said slightly unconfident.
The wood nymphs had not come for this but their faces showed even more relief than before. They than said, “Thank you, kind Sea Foam.
After these words, she ran off to see what the water nymphs needed.
The water nymphs wanted a change in scenery. They were tired of the same old thing so, she gathered the people and sent them to high ground.
Then, Sea Foam and her older sister, Storm, caused a storm so large that the land moved into different continents. When this happened, Sea Foam’s amulet changed from how it was to how the land and sea are in the world.
That is why we have our land and water the way it is today. .

[sera]

Interesting! ^^ Do you want an actual critique or is that just a piece you wrote to write? ^^ lol *wonders if that made sense*

[Belladandy]

Whoo! I love stories! *glee happy happy glee*
Will read ASAP ;D

[Stormelle]

No that ones not going to go on I think here's one that has one started but not finished.


Kate's Escape
By: Michelle Loveless



The end would come, not yet but soon. Kate blinked into the darkness. Even if she weren't blind it would have been had to see. There was a thump as someone stumbled up the stairs. Let this darkness leave me Kate thought.
"Hello?" came the voice of a friend yet as Kate could no longer see she knew not who."Kate you here?" the voice questioned.
"Yes!" Kate called to her then she thought she heard the person move to her she felt the gentle fingers of her mother touch her head.
"Kate darling I know how you fell," her mother let out a sigh.
"No you don't," Kate cried rolling away from her mother's hand "How could he momma he just ran off with her and now we find out he's talking about marring her!" Kate's eldest brother had moved only three days before and Kate wanted him back she loved her brother dearly.
Her mother's hands where wet now "my sweet little daughter I know it's hard but he's not my little baby anymore."
"Why mamma? Why did he move?"Kate asked hugging her mother.
"I guess because her loved her that much," her mother replied holding her head in her lap.
The terse stooped there was a nook on the door. "Hello? Mother!" came the voice of her brother.
Kate jumped in surprise and rushed to the door ,"Why?..... Why are you back," she asked hugging him.
"Well I don't like it there it seems like to much of a city," his voice faded as Kate starred from her dream.
That had been six years before. Her brother was dead. She could not beer this she already had to tend for her sister alone. Her mother was dead and there father was gone they lived in there Aunt Lin's house but she was hardly there Kate taught her and her sister it was very hard.
There was a tap at the door and her sister five year old sister Jennie entered."Kate you up?" she asked and as she saw her sister a small grin spread across her face. "Aunt Lin is home and wants to see you," her sister said coming to her.
"What dose she want?" Kate asked frowning her Aunt was always rude to her.
"I don't know," said her little sister trying to look series.
Kate scrabbled out of bed and piked up her sister and headed down the stairs."Aunt Lin you wanted me?" said Kate as her Aunt came into site.
"Yes!' came the angry voice of her Aunt. "There are dishes ever where!"
"But-" Kate said before she was interrupted.
"Do I care for buts girl?!" she said turning to face Kate.
"No mam ," she said not looking at her.
"Exactly! So put that child down let me rest and do these dishes!" she said in a stern voice.
Kate set her sister down and turned on the water. Jenny looked at her Aunt and asked," Aunty Lin can I stay up with her?"
Aunt Lin looked at her and her face softened ,"Yes Jenny. You may." She then turned and walked to her room.
"Jenny get on the stool you can dry them," Kate said in a whisper.
~
After they were done Kate told her sister of a plan that had formed in her head. They would run away and find their father and live with him. Her little sister noded and they put their things in the small trunk they had and jumped out Jenny' window and ran into the darkness looking for their father.









Here it is!

[sera]

Thanks, Leela! ^^ I hope you enjoy wot we have so far. . . We just added another long section. . . ^^

^^ That's pretty good, Stormelle! ^^ You may want to put in a break at the end of the dream, b/c it was a bit confusing at first. ^^

[Stormelle]

Okay Well I'm off to work on the rest of the strory. Likes the new entrey. ^-^

[sera]

Thankies! ^^ It took awhile!! *waits for her friend to come back online so she can write some more* lol

[Audrey the lazy]

WOW! That was really good! I liked it alot, or at least what I've read of it. *heh* Still gotta read the last entry, but I haven't gotten much time to yet... :-\ Keep writing it, though. I'm interested in seeing what happens!

[sera]

^^ thankies, Audrey! ^^ We're getting a real kick out of it. . . lol We've been writing together off and on for. . . hrms. . . prolly 7 or 8 years. . . oO' wow. . . now i feel old.

[Audrey the lazy]

XD Once, around two years ago I think, I wrote a really, really weird story with my friend Becky... It was for a project in history/math class and we chose to write a comedy about a smart-aleck squirrel who ended up being blasted into the past with his master by this evil dude, Computoral... the names were really weird (Icarus was the squirrel, and Programmel was his master), and so was the plot... I took it out a few days ago and read it, and it was so primitive, though it was very hilarious, in ways...! ;D Again, random thoughts from Audrey, because that happens to be the only time she ever wrote with another person... ^^;

[sera]

LOL ^^ I think it'd be great if you'd post it for us to see!!! hehe . . .

I think collab writing is my favourite way to write. . ^^ I RP a LOT on some other forums. I have to say most of my really good ideas come from coposting with someone. . . ^^

[Belladandy]

Same here I REALLY SINK at writing stories by myself. But when it comes to RPing I do sort of a good job.
Strange almost all of my guys are comic relivfs. Even my serious guy have there qorkie moments

PS I'm reading the story now hmm...not bad!